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Band 2.5

Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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Parts of the world should sell their food to their population for consumption
instead
 of other
countries
. I am in complete agreement with
this
 statement. In the given essay I will definite reasons for that including examples. First of all,
countries
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countries'
country's
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 production are exporting
each
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to each
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 other but I think it is not
cost-effective
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a cost-effective
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 way for the populations of them. Every product
that is
 produced in
country
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a country
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 should not
export
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be exported
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 or the government should not import something from other parts of the world as
none
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no
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 country is producing sufficient items or goods for their citizens' consumption.
For example
, the mayor of Uzbekistan said that the consumption
demanding
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 is increasing than producing merchandise.
Secondly
, if every country
provide
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themselves
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itself
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by
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with
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 their products , the inhabitants make an effort to earn money or food for their family or children
even
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and even
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 export their harvest to other
countries
 . By exporting humans will be
more rich
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 than
government
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the government
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. In conclusion, the government's export
make
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makes
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 income for the
countries
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country's
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 development and the people's effort for their business
leas
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leads
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 them their wealth.
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task achievement
Try to clearly define the key terms and concepts in your introduction to establish a strong foundation for your argument. Consider providing a balanced view by discussing different perspectives before stating your conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence and cohesion of your essay by using linking words and phrases. This will help in connecting ideas more logically. For example, use terms like "On the other hand," "Nevertheless," or "In addition" to guide the reader through your arguments.
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Provide more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points. This will help clarify your ideas and make your arguments more persuasive.
task achievement
You have chosen a clear standpoint and maintained consistency in your argument throughout the essay, which is a strong aspect of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a good structure with an introduction and a conclusion, highlighting an understanding of academic essay frameworks.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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