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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008
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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of five
proteins
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 of fruits and vegetables by three different people
Men
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,
women
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 and
children
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 per day for 7 years , from 2001 to 2008 in the UK. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is obvious that there was a noticeable decrease which was the most consumption ,from 2001 to 2005 for consuming fruits and vegetables by
women
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,
however
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, in 2005 it slightly fell . One point which is considered is the fact that
children
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 and
men
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 used 7 different
proteins
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 with a steady proportion , from 2001 to 2003 , they consumed around 13 per
cent
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 which is steady for
children
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 ,and 17 per
cent
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 belongs to
men
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, but, from 2004 to 2006 ,they used fruits and vegetables with a slight increase from 20 to 27 per
cent
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, using
proteins
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 by
children
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 in 2004 was noticeably grew for about 17 per
cent
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 and
this
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 upward trend was constantly continued to 2006 by 22 per
cent
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,
however
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,
men
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 and
children
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 have consumed a slight percentage of
proteins
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 which is a downward trend in 2007 and 2008, for
men
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 it was 27 per
cent
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 in 2007 and
then
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 decreased slightly 21 per
cent
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 in 2008.For
children
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 in 2007 was 26 per
cent
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 and 23 per
cent
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 in 2008.
On the other hand
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,the most consumption in
this
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 period belongs to
women
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 ,in 2001 ,they applied about 22 per
cent
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 and for the next years, there was a moderately grow to 2005 for about 30 per
cent
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 and in 2006 ,
women
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 used
proteins
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 the most to 35 per
cent
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 , but after that in 2007 and 2008, they had decreased consuming
proteins
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 to 32 and 30 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proteins, men, women, children, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Portion: a serving size of food.
  • Trend: a general direction in which something is developing or changing.
  • Demographic: related to the structure of populations.
  • Awareness: knowledge or perception of a situation or fact.
  • Socioeconomic status: a person's economic and social position based on income, education, and occupation.
  • Accessibility: the quality of being easy to obtain or use.
  • Guidelines: a set of recommendations or advice on how something should be done.
  • Subsidy: a sum of money granted by the government to assist an industry or business.
  • Lifestyle: the way in which a person lives.
  • Public health: the health of the population as a whole, especially as monitored, regulated, and promoted by the state.
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