the charts below show the number of japanes tourists travelling abroad between 1985 to 1995 and australias share of the japanese tourist market . wirte a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

the charts below show the number of japanes tourists travelling abroad between 1985 to 1995 and australias share of the japanese tourist market . wirte a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given charts illustrate the
number
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of
Japanese
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visitors who
traveled
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travelled
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overseas between 1985 and 1995.
Also
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, the Australian portion of the
Japanese
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travel market. 
Overall
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, the
number
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of
Japanese
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tourists is increasing every year from 1985 to 1995.
Additionally
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, Australia's
share
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was growing.  In 1985, the
number
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of
Japanese
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individuals was around 5
million
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;
then
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, in the following years, it grew until it changed
into
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16
million
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people
traveling
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abroad. 
That is
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why Australian
share
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percentages were rising from 2
percent
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in 1985 to 5
percent
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in 1988. The
share
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counters a slight decrease in 1989, but it
starts
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started
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growing rapidly up until it becomes 6
percent
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in 1995. To
summrize
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summarise
, The charts show an annual increase in
Japanese
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tourists from 1985 to 1995, with Australia's
share
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growing from 2% in 1985 to 6% in 1995. The
number
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of
Japanese
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individuals in Australia increased from 5
million
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in 1985 to 16
million
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in 1995.
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