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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graphs depict the number of subscriptions to mobile and fixed phones for every hundred people in Eitria, India,
UK
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the UK
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, and Uruguay from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, the figure for mobile
phone
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phones
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 fluctuated more than for the fixed one. In the
UK
, 100
subscription
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subscriptions
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was
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were
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 recorded for mobile
phone
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phones
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 in 2005,
and
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apply
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it
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which
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 is almost twice as much as the fixed
type
.
Although
UK
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the UK
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 had the highest number at first in both
phone
type
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types
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, they remained stable throughout the decade
,
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apply
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 and
eventually
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were eventually
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 outnumbered by Uruguay for mobile
phone
subscription
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subscriptions
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 in 2009. In the
last
 year, Uruguay reached approximately 30 more than
UK
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the UK
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 for mobile
phone
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phones
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 and around 30 lower for the fixed
type
. The two remaining countries nearly had no
subscriber
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subscribers
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 in 2005 for both
type
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types
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, and it remained static throughout the period, except for mobile
phone
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phones
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 in India, which had a gradual increase between 2007 and 2015,
accounted
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accounting
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at
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for
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 approximately 70 in the end.
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