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The chart below gives information about computer ownership in the US from 1997 to 2012.

The chart below gives information about computer ownership in the US from 1997 to 2012.
The provided line graph gives information about the
percent
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 of
computer
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 owners in America, between 1997 and 2012. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be clearly seen that 3 types of holders of computing devices ( with one ,two and three computers), experienced a slight growth,
while
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 there was a noticeable drop in the percentage of Americans with no
computer
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. Looking into the details ,it is obvious that in 1997 people with the lowest interest rates of those having computers experienced a moderate increase by 2012 ,and those with only
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computer
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computers
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 reached the pick point by 50%. Americans with no
computer
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,
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, despite being dominant in the first year , there was a significant drop by 2012, from 68% to 9%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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