Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative atibe impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree.
Most individuals advocate that social
media
has destructive effects on communities and humans. In my opinion, this
is a positive trend because people
learn to socialize with others and generate money from these platforms. This
essay will elaborate further
in upcoming paragraphs to support my statement.
To commence with, Social networking sites are a topmost platform to promote your new businesses, share your skills, and broaden your network. In other words
, it would be beneficial for people
to earn a profitable income if they knew how to represent their product in the form of content as per public demands and build consumer-seller direct relationships. For instance
, A famous fashion designer Nancy Tyagi is a world-famous brand these days due to
platforms like Instagram, and Youtube as she got the chance to perform at Met Gala 2023 with celebrities worldwide. These days, Nancy Tyagi is sponsored by the most popular magazines in India vogue as well as
savvy. As a result
, Her yearly revenue increased by 80% which is around 5cr per year. Thus
, social media
websites could be a greater income generator for your startup businesses.
Further
strengthening my views, nowadays websites like Twitter, Instagram, and many more become well-known places to make individuals and society aware of the positive and negative incidents happening in their surroundings. To explicate, the greatest number of people
are using these platforms nowadays. Apart from
this
digital media
is very user-friendly. So, one person can easily circulate the message by live streaming and video with others. For example
, On 26th July 2024 at R.G Medical College Kolkata, a 26-year-old young girl was gang raped and murdered in the hospital during her 24hrs long shift but this
case was dismissed by police and college authorities. After 10 days news was shared on Instagram by one of her colleagues and the video went viral which increased the intention of people
all around the nation and helped to give her justice. The evidence proves that networking sites have tremendous advantages in making people
more aware of emergencies.
In conclusion, Social networking websites are not only helpful in assembling new careers but also
make society connected in any difficult situations. The pros outweigh the cons of social media
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task achievement
Ensure a balanced discussion by addressing potential negative impacts of social networking sites as well, even if you eventually disagree with those points. This can demonstrate a more comprehensive understanding.
coherence cohesion
In the conclusion, restate the main points more clearly and provide a summarizing statement that ties back to the essay prompt more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
Use transitions to clearly distinguish between different perspectives or parts of the argument, which can enhance coherence.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant and specific examples, such as the case of Nancy Tyagi and the incident at R.G Medical College, which strongly support the arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets up the opinion and structure of the essay, while each paragraph focuses on a specific idea, maintaining clear and logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Effective use of examples to support the claims makes the argument more convincing and clearly shows the essay's main points.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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