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Some people think that e-books are the bet of paper books while others think that paper books will never disappear.Discuss both sided and give your opinion.

#people #e-books #bet #paper #books
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It is undeniable that reading
books
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 is a boon for
individuals
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 mind so it does not matter that the person is reading on
paper
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 or on internet, the thing that anyone cares about is knowledge only.
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, many people consider
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books
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 as the reason for
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the disappearence
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disappearence
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disappearance
 of
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paper based
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paper-based
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books
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,
while
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other
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others
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 think that the existence of
paper
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books
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 can not be disappeared.
This
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viewpoints including my opinion in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, with advanced
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technology,
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 it becomes feasible for anyone to get access to
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 of
books
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 of their choice as the portability of
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books
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 can provide
individuals
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 with the
opprtunity
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opportunity
 to carry an extensive library with them without physical space limitations.
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,
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 that
individuals
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 read online can
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 them
convenience
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the convenience
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 to read the
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 anywhere and at any time even without carrying the weight of
physical
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a physical
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book
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.
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,
e-
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books
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comes
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 with significant features that
attracts
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attract
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 the eyes of readers
such
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 as
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giving them
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the opportunity
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 to set the size and colour of
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the font
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according to
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 their style which they want, hyperlinks, and multimedia elements which
helps
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help
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 in enhancing the reading experience.
Furthermore
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, one of the main
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reasons
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 for supporting online
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are
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is
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 that they are
enviornment
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environment
 friendly which helps to curb the usage of
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 on manufacturing offline
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 since they reduce the need for
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, tree cutting, and cost of physical transport as the pollution caused by vehicles becomes the reason of great concern.
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, the demand
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to read
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books
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 via
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 decreases the rate of tree cutting by 25% because most
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the
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writters
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writers
 are now fond of publishing their
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 on social media rather than on
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 which
also
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cut
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 the cost of publishing for them.
However
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, a tactile experience and satisfaction that many people find only by reading
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books
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 is irreplaceable, contributing a deeper emotional connection with the material as the experience and the smell of the pages of
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book
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books
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 can not be replaced with any kind of e-
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.
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, reading online is free from any distraction
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 by social media apps which force
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 specifically children
to
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not to read
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book
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books
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, but to watch videos for their entertainment and even technical issues with electronic devices can not stop your reading.
To conclude
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, in my opinion, I consider
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books
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 more beneficial as they do not restrict your learning in any circumstances even when
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a hard
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 copy of
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the book
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 is not available to you,
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however
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however,
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 it is true that online reading comes with significant distractions but overcoming them is a person's choice.
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coherence cohesion
In your writing, make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to improve coherence. Linking words should be used more effectively to connect your ideas logically.
task achievement
You have provided a well-structured argument with a strong introduction and conclusion, but consider developing your ideas further and provide more specific examples to support your arguments for even more clarity.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a well-defined introduction and conclusion, ensuring that your reader understands your main point of view clearly.
task achievement
The discussion is balanced with points supporting both e-books and paper books, demonstrating good task achievement.
general
The choice of vocabulary is varied and appropriate, enhancing the overall quality of the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Portability
  • Interactivity
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Tactile experience
  • Emotional connection
  • Technical problems
  • Distractions
  • Historical significance
  • Timeless artifacts
  • Information retention
  • Linearity of text
  • Physical collections
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