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In some countries people prefer to rent a house than buy one. What are advantages and disadvantages of renting a property

#countries #people #rent #house #property
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mostly
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 individuals think
preferable
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it preferable
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 to lease accommodations rather than
owing
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rent
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 their places. The pros and cons of the rental properties are discussed
further
. To start with, positive impacts of rental housing.
Firstly
,
process
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the process
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 of renting is
economic
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 and
crumbsome
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cumbersome
.
In particular
,
this
 is convenient for the young generation who want to start their jobs and
carrier
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career
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 in big towns. As
,
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 rental properties require less initial costs compared to buying.
Secondly
, it provides the opportunity to try different
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 or locations without any commitment to the place. Moving forward to
negative
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 impacts of rental apartments, there are several uncertainties regarding
increase
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of
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 rent , renewal of lease agreements and moving out of
house
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the house
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 if
landlord
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the landlord
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 decides to sell the property.
Also
, in some countries, it is considered
as
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 social stigma of not owning property,
as well as
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putting
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standings
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 of
person
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a person
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 down in society. Taking everything into consideration,
decision
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the decision
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of renting
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to rent
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,
leasing
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lease
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 or
buying
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buy
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a houses
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houses
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house
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 depends upon several factors
such
 as
social
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the social
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, personal and financial needs of an individual.
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Task Achievement
Consider providing clearer and more detailed examples to support your points about the advantages and disadvantages of renting.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and transitions to enhance the flow between sections and points.
Task Achievement
Try to explore the topic more broadly by including additional advantages and disadvantages or by delving deeper into the impacts on society and individuals.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've structured your essay well with clear distinctions between the advantages and disadvantages of renting.
Coherence & Cohesion
Providing an introduction and a summing-up paragraph helps in framing your discussion effectively.

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