Cohabitation is believed to bring huge advantages for young people since it enables them to fully understand each other before deciding to get married. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
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marriage
is highly advantageous as it permits them Use synonyms
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also
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everyday challenges together which Correct your spelling
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curb
the chances of divorce after Correct subject-verb agreement
curbs
marriage
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marriage
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Therefore
, it is useful to live together for a month and decide carefully.
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essay argues that coexistence is important for young couples who are thinking of weddings. In my Linking Words
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Content Development
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Task Response
You have presented a clear opinion on the topic and consistently supported it throughout the essay. This gives your response a strong focus and ensures alignment with the task requirements.
Task Response
The introduction and conclusion are well-structured, aligning with IELTS essay format expectations, which helps in effectively framing your arguments and providing a coherent start and end to your discussion.
Task Response
You provided a personal example which is relevant and demonstrates a thoughtful engagement with the topic.
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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
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- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example