The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares air pollution
level
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levels
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by three factors, electricity generation, transport, and industry, in distinct countries for one year.
It is clear that
China showed the highest figures for all mentioned causes, comprising around 60, 70, and 80
PPM
respectively. In the case of Australia, the figures for all the
sectores
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sectors
were under 20
PPM
, which were the lowest numbers in transport and industry.
However
, electricity was the second lowest,
following
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by Japan.
Also
, Japan had relatively low numbers compared to America or China,
whereas
, in the industry sector, it was higher than America, accounting for slightly higher than 40
PPM
. In the USA, the category
which
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people produced the most pollution in the air was transportation. It amounted to around 58
PPM
which was the second highest across all the areas.
On the other hand
, the other two categories in the same country comprised 30
PPM
each. It was twice as low as the
tranport
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transport
sector.
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