The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph compares air pollution

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by three factors, electricity generation, transport, and industry, in distinct countries for one year.

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China showed the highest figures for all mentioned causes, comprising around 60, 70, and 80

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respectively. In the case of Australia, the figures for all the

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sectors

were under 20

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, which were the lowest numbers in transport and industry.

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, electricity was the second lowest,

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by Japan.

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, Japan had relatively low numbers compared to America or China,

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, in the industry sector, it was higher than America, accounting for slightly higher than 40

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. In the USA, the category

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people produced the most pollution in the air was transportation. It amounted to around 58

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which was the second highest across all the areas.

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, the other two categories in the same country comprised 30

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each. It was twice as low as the

tranport

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transport

sector.

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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advent of the internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working argument has more advantages or disadvantages? Share your personal experience in your essay.

There is a growing awareness among people today that life should be enjoyed in all possible ways while the traditionalists do not agree with this view. They think that there are much more to be done in life other than just enjoying. Discuss both the views and draw your own opinions.