The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. https://practicepteonline.com/wp-content/uploads/2024/09/test-121-min.png

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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The graph given indicates the number of activity
participants
of a social centre located in Melbourne, between the years 2000 and 2020.
Overall
, we can see dramatic changes in Table tennis, Musical performance and
Amatrue
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Amateur
dramatics, but other activities didn't face much
of
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change.
To begin
with, the most drastic change belongs to Table tennis, with
almost
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an almost
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5 times bigger audience over
time
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the time
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period, starting at 16
participants
at
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in
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2000 and reaching above 50
participants
in 2020. The next activity which increased
noticably
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noticeably
is
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Musical performance, which began with almost no
participants
and by 2005, it started gaining more attractions, reaching about 20
participants
by 2020. As shown in the graph, there is a big fall in one of the activities. Amateur dramatics faced a decrease since 2005, starting from 26 and reaching 6
participants
by 2020. Other activities including
film
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club, which holds the first place among
number
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a number
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of
participants
and martial arts, stayed almost the same, with little to no change over the course of 20 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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