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The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ate locally produced food. To what extent does the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

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People
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 consumption habits can influence to environment and
economy
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 life. The example is about
food
, especially local
food
. The
food
 we consume every day is generally
food
 that comes from farmers who produce crops in rural areas. The
food
 travels thousands of miles
form
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from
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 farm to consumer with prior management between farmers and distributors before the
food
 is consumed by
people
. Some
people
 think it would be better
to
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for
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 our environment and
economy
 if
people
 only ate locally produced
food
. In my opinion, one of the major advantages of consuming locally produced
food
 is the significant reduction in carbon emissions that would result from transporting
food
 over long distances.
This
 can lead to better air quality and contribute to mitigating climate change.
Beside
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 that, local
food
 consumption helps boost the
economy
 by supporting local farmers and businesses, which can lead to job creation and a more resilient local
economy
. Eating locally can lead to fresher, more nutritious
food
 options because the produce is not subjected to long storage times or long-distance shipping. On the downside, relying solely on local
food
 might limit consumer choices, especially in certain regions that cannot produce a wide variety of foods
due to
 climate or soil conditions. The cost of local
food
 might be higher compared to imported alternatives, potentially leading to higher living expenses for consumers. There might be seasonal limitations to
food
 availability if relying only on local produce, affecting the year-round availability of certain
food
 items. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages to our environment and
economy
 if
people
 only
ate
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locally produced
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locally-produced
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food
.
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific local foods or regions that exemplify the benefits or drawbacks discussed.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your argument flows logically by explicitly linking advantages and disadvantages with phrases that connect them directly back to the main question of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively outline and wrap up the main points of your essay.
task achievement
You have a clear understanding of both sides of the argument, which helps in presenting a balanced view.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • locally sourced
  • sustainable farming
  • food miles
  • supply chain
  • economic resilience
  • nutritional value
  • cultural diversity
  • food security
  • seasonality
  • imported goods
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • fresh produce
  • agricultural diversity
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