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The table below gives information about the salaries of high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The table below gives information about the salaries of high school teachers in five countries in 2009.
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The table illustrates the income of high school
teachers
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 in five
countries
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, namely Australia,
Denmark
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,
Luxembourg
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, Korea, and Japan in the year 2009. The measurement is presented in the US
dollars
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that among the five mentioned
countries
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,
Luxembourg
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's newly hired
teachers
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 had the best financial status,
while
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 their counterparts in Japan had the lowest income.
Luxembourg
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’s highest payment was
also
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 the first in the ranking.
However
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, the instructors in
Denmark
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 reached the maximum payment in the fewest
years
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. In terms of the
amount
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 of money gained when starting their jobs,
teachers
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 in
Luxembourg
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 are the first in the group, followed by the ones who teach in
Denmark
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,
although
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 Danish
teachers
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 receive almost half that of
Luxembourg
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teachers
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 (80000
dollars
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, and 47000
dollars
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 in respective order. In the three other
countries
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, educators are paid almost 30000
dollars
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 at
this
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 level. Considering the salary gained annually, almost the same pattern can be observed, and again
Luxembourg
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 stands at the top of the list, followed by
Denmark
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, and instructors in other regions are paid roughly 50000
dollars
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. As can be predicted, in
Luxembourg
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, the educators make the maximum
amount
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 of money,
although
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 it takes 30
years
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 for them to get to
this
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 point. Korean
teachers
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 receive the second highest
amount
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 of salary after 37
years
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, and
teachers
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 in other
countries
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 are paid a maximum
amount
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 of salary of around 55000,
although
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 it happens after 34
years
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 in Japan, but 8 and 9
years
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 in
Denmark
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 and Australia, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, countries, denmark, luxembourg, dollars, years, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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