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Many countries want to host international sports events while others are not

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It is undeniable that hosting an international sports event provides a feeling of pride to the nation,
while
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 others consider that it is more problematic than
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beneficial.
This
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 essay will analyse both viewpoints including my opinion in the following paragraphs.
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 with, there are several merits of organizing events.
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, it aims to boost the international recognition of the
country
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 in front of others which helps to increase tourism. Since many people come to know about the event
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 they definitely become curious about visiting a particular
country
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 and that not only
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benefits hotels but
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the
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For example
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, In Brazil, the number of tourists increased by 45% after the
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 games organized there.
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, it
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 aids in developing the infrastructure of the
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 because it is necessary to provide comfortable living space to visitors who come to watch matches, so the
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 surely build new buildings, roads and stadiums.
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, it provides individuals with job opportunities when new structures are planned to be created.
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, it gives rise to the economy of the nation.
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, hosting sports has some demerits too.
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, it diverted the
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's attention to sports only from other facilities needed in countries
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 as healthcare, and education which left citizens suffering from problems even related to basic amenities.
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, creating new infrastructure puts pressure on the
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 to spend a
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 amount of money which has huge consequences for the
country
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 in the long term.
To conclude
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,
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 being a host costs a lot to the
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, it helps to improve career opportunities and well as tourism in the nation.

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task response
Ensure to expand on each argument and provide a little more depth for a more comprehensive essay.
coherence cohesion
Try to transition smoothly between paragraphs to enhance the flow of the essay.
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The essay provides a balanced view by analyzing both pros and cons of hosting international sports events.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion is well-maintained.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • host nation
  • economic benefits
  • infrastructure development
  • global standing
  • international investments
  • cultural exchange
  • financial burden
  • debt
  • environmental impact
  • short-term economic boost
  • facilities underutilization
  • displacement of residents
  • tourism
  • job creation
  • visibility on the international stage
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