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You recently did a short coockery course. The coockery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at rhe coockery school. In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since the course suggest another coockery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you fine,I am writing
this
 letter regarding the request
feedback
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for feedback
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 about
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the cockery
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cockery
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cookery
crockery
 course which I
recnetly
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recently
 attended at your institution .
To begin
,with I have to say that
was really enjoy
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was really enjoyed
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 and I really
enjoy
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enjoyed
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 and I have been living alone and I have to make food every day so It was funny for me,
besides
,I learnt many
recepies
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recipes
 from many
diffrent countires
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different countries
such
 as
:
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apply
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italian
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Italian
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 food ,
indian
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Indian
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cusines
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cuisine
cuisines
,
mexican
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Mexican
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 food, and so on .
Secondly
,I have started combining all those
learing
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learning
 into practicals ,
furthermore
 ,when
i
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I
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was completed
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have completed
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 the course ,I have
been
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apply
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consistly
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consistently
prepairing
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preparing
 dishes every day,
Also
, on weekends I experiment with cuisines which are new to me. I would
like
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 recommend the school that held a cycle for people who want to learn professional cookery for 6 or 8 months. Thank you for all the learnings , Best Regards, Pardis Ghobadi
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to structure your letter by clearly dividing it into paragraphs based on each bullet point in the task. This will help enhance coherence and cohesion.
Language Accuracy
Ensure you correct small errors to improve clarity and increase your attention to grammatical details.
Task Achievement
You successfully covered all points required in the task and provided relevant examples, which is a great approach to task achievement.
Task Achievement
The letter had a polite tone throughout, especially with a formal greeting and closing.
Task Achievement
Your enthusiasm for the course comes across clearly, which makes the letter engaging.
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