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The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below
show
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shows
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 information on other items in five different countries in 2002 All national consumer expenditure
food
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is food
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,drinks and tobacco.
This
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 has a big percentage from all
country
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countries
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. Explain how socioeconomic factors,
such
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 as income levels, employment rates, and cost of living, might impact discretionary spending patterns in these countries. And
also
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big
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a big
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 factor has
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the country
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country
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country's
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 population
Clothing
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The clothing
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 and footwear expenditure percentage so much in Italy
9.0
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at 9.0
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% and
very
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much
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less
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little
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 expenditure
Sweden
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in Sweden
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 have just 5.40 percentage. Leisure and education less for all national. Absolutely leisure and education
supported
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are supported
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 by
nation
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the nation
a nation
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 but I think that's free for all people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discretionary income
  • expenditure
  • spending patterns
  • comparisons
  • outliers
  • cultural influence
  • economic conditions
  • leisure activities
  • trend analysis
  • cost of living
  • socioeconomic factors
  • proportion
  • priority
  • developed countries
  • employment rates
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