The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The given charts illustrate the average share of

sodium

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, saturated, fats and added sugars in typical meals eaten in the USA. These nutrients may be unhealthy if consumed too much.

Overall

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sodium

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and saturated fat are consumed more in dinner.

Also

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, added

sugar

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is eaten more in

snacks

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However

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sodium

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, saturated fat and added

sugar

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are eaten at the lowest proportion in

breakfast

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. The most meal which contains

sodium

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and saturated fat is dinner with mean proportion 43 and 37 respectively.

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, the second meal which includes

sodium

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and saturated fat is lunch with average percentages of 29 and 26 respectively.

Also

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Sodium

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is eaten at the same level in

breakfast

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and

snacks

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at 14 per

cent

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Snacks

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include a meanly 21 per

cent

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saturated fat,

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the lowest share of meals which contain saturated fat is

breakfast

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with 16 per

cent

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. The

most

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meal which includes added

sugar

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are

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snacks

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with 42 per

cent

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However

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, the lowest share is

breakfast

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with 16 per

cent

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Subsequently

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, added

sugar

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is consumed at dinner and lunch with 23 and 19 per

cent

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respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, snacks, breakfast, cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Nutrients
Unhealthy
Daily intake
Percentage
Carbohydrates
Fats
Proteins
Meals
Balanced diet
Consumption
Excess
Health implications
Obesity
Diabetes
Heart disease
Convenience foods
Fast foods
Socioeconomic factors
Lifestyle choices
Healthy eating habits
Dietary recommendations

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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

One of your friends is planning to visit your country and asking you for some information. Write a letter to him/her and say: o when the best time to visit your country is o suggest a plan for the travel o recommend places to visit in your country

Nowadays people like to use new electronic equipment. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today people do less exercise. Some people believe that conducting sporting events such as the Olympics or World Cup encourage people to live healthy while others indicate that there are various other methods to remain healthy. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school, Do the advantages of this outweight disadvantages.

The US film industry has too much influence on the film industry around the world. Governments have a duty to invest money in their own film industries to protect and develop their cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?