More and more people are using the internet to contact existing friends and even make new friends. Some people are of the opinion that this has strengthened relationships between existing friends, whilst others think the opposite is true. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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task achievement
Expand on the arguments for each perspective to strengthen the essay. Adding more examples for both viewpoints could enhance the depth and support for your main points.
coherence cohesion
Improve cohesion by ensuring logical transitions between ideas. For example, use linking phrases such as 'on the contrary,' 'in addition', or 'however' for smoother flow between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear, focused topic sentence that guides the reader through your arguments and supports your conclusion effectively.
task achievement
The essay successfully covers both sides of the issue, presenting a balanced view before offering a personal opinion in the concluding paragraph.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introductory paragraph and a strong conclusion that encapsulates your viewpoint.
task achievement
The use of real-world context, such as the example of young people who primarily contact friends online, helps to ground the argument in reality.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example