It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, it can be seen that
some
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in some
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countries
students
are not encouraged to study
science
as a
subject
. The main reason behind it is
due to
the education system is not appropriate for
students
.
As a
result
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result,
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it could bring a vast amount of damage
on
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to
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our economic growth in a
country
Most of the educational industries are not good enough to provide quality education,
therefore
, so many
students
ignore the importance of
science
as a
subject
.
For example
, Navid wanted to become a computer engineer but he
wasn
'
t
able to apply for
this
course because he
wasn
'
t
able to
full fill
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fulfil
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the requirements given by the university.
Main
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reason was he
wasn
'
t
a
science
student
in
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at
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his HSC level and no one
encourage
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encouraged
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him to take
science
as a
subject
and that failed him to become an engineer.
On the other hand
,
by
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apply
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not choosing
science
as a
subject
could
danger
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prevent
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a
country
's society
to balance
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from balancing
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workforce
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the workforce
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for their
country
.
For instance
, Bangladesh
the
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country
of nature,
this
country
was
depended
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dependent
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on their agriculture, but
due to
lower
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the lower
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rate of graduates from
science
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the science
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department,
this
country
wasn
'
t
able to continue
their
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its
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tradition and profit from agriculture. They had to bring people from
out side
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outside
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of
this
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the
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country
and had to invest more than local people.
Therefore
, their society
breakdown
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broke down
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into pieces and
their
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they
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were damaged by
this
issue. In conclusion, to balance both
workforce
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the workforce
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and economic growth of a
country
; a
country
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country's
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education system should be more productive to ensure their
students
are choosing
right
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the right
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subject
for their future
career
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careers
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. So, that can bring an effective improvement to the society as well.
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task achievement
Try to expand on the ideas presented with more detailed explanations and examples. Your arguments can be strengthened by elaborating on points, such as the educational system's flaws in more detail or the societal impacts of limited science education.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph follows logical order and doesn't jump between ideas. Try to stick to one main idea per paragraph for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay features an introduction and conclusion that clearly outline the problem and offer a potential solution, creating a strong structural foundation.
task achievement
You identify key issues such as the education system's inadequacies and socioeconomic consequences, which are relevant and demonstrate comprehension of the problem.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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