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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Many
people
 refer to having their own
house
 rather than renting. The following essay will discuss about reasons, advantages and disadvantages of
this
 perception.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons that
people
 tend to buy a
house
 rather than taking a lease. First of all, housing is not only a living place but
also
 be considered
as
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a profitable investment, especially
there
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since there
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are
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 more demand
in
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for
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 housing but
limited
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a limited
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in
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the
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supply of properties.
For example
,
instead
 of paying monthly rent,
people
 can take a
loan
 to own a
house
 and pay
loan
 interest which
almost
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equals
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 to the rent in some cases. Especially, in many countries
such
 as Australia and New Zealand, the
loan
 interest is deducted from personal income tax which is beneficial to the property owners.
Furthermore
,
owing
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 a
house
 benefits
to
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people
 in different aspects.
For example
, a family really needs their own
house
therefore
 they will have more spacious living areas for their children. In
additio
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addition
 n, they can
proactive
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 decorate and design their living area by their style and
therefore
 they can fully enjoy and be happy in their
house
. It is the fact that housing is the biggest issue for anyone, having their own
house
 would make them become more comfortable to focus on their career path to have good money to pay a
loan
, which is
finally
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 them to achieve better performance in work.
However
, there are
also
 disadvantages to
own
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 a
house
. Normally,
people
 have difficulty to buy a
house
 because lacking
of
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finance.
For those
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Those
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, who do not have sufficient financial resources,
they
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need to take bank loans which sometimes put them under
a
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huge financial pressure. In conclusion, owning a
house
 benefits
people
 both in terms of investment and living aspects.
Although
 there are both disadvantages and advantages of owning a
house
,
people
 tend to get their own
house
 rather than renting one.
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