The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. 

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram gives us information about how
making
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to make
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smoked
fish
. In general, the diagram has 13 types of produce fishing.
First,
fish
hunts
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are hunted
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and
transports
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transported
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to the factory until they are ready
to
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for
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the stores.
Firstly
,
fish
are hunted in the ocean or sea
through
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by
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the
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boat.
Then
they carry into the ports. After that
fish
are
freezed
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frozen
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and melted with fresh water.
Secondly
, they are dramatically cut with a knife. Alternatively,
fish
are cleaned with yellow colouring water and instantly that
are
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is
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smoked. At that time,
fish
are packaged and sent into the box
which
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with
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its
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a
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temperature
is
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apply
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a
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of
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0
degree
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degrees
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. Afterwards , they are situated in the cold box and
finally
, they are delivered
into
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to
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the
fish
shops.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.

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