The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart
provide
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provides
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information about the change level
number
of Asian
elephants
in 1997 and 2004.
Overall
it's clear that
bar
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the bar
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chart in India has
largest
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the largest
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number
in two years
while
the lowest
counries
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countries
is China. In 1997, India arrived population of
elephants
to under 10000 after that
Myanmar
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Myanmar's
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arrived
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population increased
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to above 5000 because
the
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apply
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elephants
is
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popular in two countries, and people
used
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a
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them a
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lot
of
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apply
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. The lowest
counries
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countries
how's
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that
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used
elephants
in
china
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China
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around 1000 after that luos and Cambodia arrived between (0_1000). It is clear in 2004 India increased the
number
for
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to
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7500. In the next
countries
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countries,
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Myanmar arrived to
to
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apply
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5000
while
anthor
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another
countries
has
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have
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lowest
number
population of
elephants
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, elephants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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