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Some people think that there will be an increased dependence on intelligent robots in the future. Others think that robots will have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The
robot
 big dream for
scientists
 because the
robot
 only dreams for
scientists
 but they create robots. We use a
robot
 for life and
this
 is very useful and easy for our
live
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. I really like a
robot
for example
, in the kitchen is very easy I want to cake
this
 is easy for me I put all the ingredients in the machine and it
preapers
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prepares
 it for me and I put it in the cooker so simple for me because my handle
do
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does
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 not dirty and I only dishes plate. The machine is really improved but now we see a talking
robot
.
Firstly
scientists
 try
for
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apply
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machines
for example
, when the tea is ready the tea maker says it is ready.
Then
 the
scientists
 developed
for
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apply
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machines they creative likely human robots. The first
robot
 is Sophie. We meet Sophie. She is very smart and she knows all languages. She is clearly but really sunny. In my opinion, she is very popular so the
scientists
 do not care about
this
 situation. She is very popular in my country she is attending a YouTube program and we ask a question for her. She knows all problems to worth and she gave clear answers. In fact, I am really scared of Sophie because she is sometimes uncontrollable for
scientists
. Maybe the technology stops for the
robot
 ıf we can not control it, the girl
robot
 may hurt us because she underestimates us. The government should warn that
scientists
 should make inventions that will make our lives easier.
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structure
Your essay needs a clear introduction and conclusion to give it structure. Consider outlining the main points you're going to discuss at the beginning, and summarize your thoughts at the end.
examples
While you provide some examples, they can be more specific and relevant to show your understanding of the topic directly. Ensure your examples directly relate to the task question, illustrating both viewpoints effectively.
development
Try to develop your main ideas more thoroughly. Each paragraph should address a specific aspect of the task and be well-supported by examples or detailed explanations.
task
You've attempted to address both views of the topic, showing an understanding of the task requirement.
creativity
Your essay creatively describes examples involving robots, showing imaginative thinking.
engagement
You express genuine engagement with the topic, particularly with the example of the robot Sophie.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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