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People nowadays tend to have children later in life. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? (267)

It can be normally seen nowadays that people usually plan to have a
child
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 during the later stages of their lives.
Although
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this
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 idea is advantageous as it allows enough
time
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 to attain financial stability for a secure future for a
child
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, I believe there are more drawbacks because females generally must face complications during and after the
time
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 of
pregnancy
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.  The main benefit of planning a baby later in
life
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 is that it enables people to make themselves economically strong
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 greater
time
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 availability.
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 to say that prospective parents tend to make themselves stable enough to give their children a standard of living, by sending them to reputable schools and universities,
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 strengthening their future.
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, it is commonly seen that parents who have children after their thirties are financially stable and give their children a wealthy lifestyle.
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, I think that the disadvantages of
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 trend have greater negative impacts.   One of the major drawbacks of having a
child
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 late affects a woman in a bad manner, in some cases, imposing a threat to her
life
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.
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 is because a woman’s body is naturally designed in
such
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 a way, and it periodically works in a manner that if women tend to give birth to a
child
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 after her thirties, it normally tends to have side effects on her own body.
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, many complications are faced at the
time
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 of
pregnancy
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 by a woman.
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, doctors generally recommend that a woman should plan her
pregnancy
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 before
this
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 tenure
otherwise
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 she has to face hardships in the later stages of her
life
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 with problems
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 as thyroid and back pain. For these reasons, the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.  In conclusion, prevailing a high standard of living for a
child
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 is usually achievable using later
child
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 planning as it allocates enough
time
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 for parents to become economically stable,
however
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, females have to go through physical and internal damage for their whole
life
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 after
pregnancy
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 which is, in my opinion, far more disadvantageous than its benefits.

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task achievement
Aim to address both advantages and disadvantages evenly, giving more depth to each point, even if you choose to argue for one side.
coherence cohesion
Add more linking words throughout your body paragraphs to enhance the flow between ideas.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion effectively encapsulate the main argument, providing clarity and direction to the essay.
complete response
The essay offers a clear position on the topic, demonstrating an understanding of the task.
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