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Task 1 The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Task 1 The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The graph gives information about how much carbon dioxide for each person in four European countries in the years 1967 to 2007.
Overall
,
while
 both
United
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 Kingdom
an
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and
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Sweden
 experienced a downward trend,
the
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Italy and Portugal witnessed
a
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an
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 upward trend throughout the
period
. In 1967, CO² emissions per person in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and
Sweden
 were 11 and 9 metric
tonnes
. England saw a steady decrease over the
period
 ,
and
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reaching
to
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9 metric
tonnes
 in 2007. At the same time ,
average
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 carbon dioxide for each individual in
Sweden
 stood at 9 metric
tonnes
 at the beginning .
Then
 it saw a rapid growth
around
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 10 metric
tonnes
 in 1977 ,
however
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this
 figure declined quickly until 1987 to approximately 7 metric Tennessee. After that
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 rate dropped swiftly end of the
period
, reaching almost 5 metric
tonnes
 in 2007. At the beginning of the
period
 Italy and Portugal experienced only an upward trend over the
period
. CO ² emissions per person
both
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in both
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 countries were around 4 and 1 metric
tonnes
 respectively.
The
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Italy's rate increased fourfold until 2007
and
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reaching around 7 metric
tonnes
.
Furthermore
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,
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Portugal's rate soared suddenly around threefold and
reaching
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reached
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 a low point than others at 5 metric
tonnes
 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, period, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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