IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
#line #carbon #dioxide #co² #emissions #person #kingdom #sweden
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph gives information about how much carbon dioxide for each person in four European countries in the years 1967 to 2007.
Overall
Linking Words
,
while
Linking Words
 both
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom
an
Correct your spelling
and
show examples
Sweden
Use synonyms
 experienced a downward trend,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Italy and Portugal witnessed
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 upward trend throughout the
period
Use synonyms
. In 1967, CO² emissions per person in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom and
Sweden
Use synonyms
 were 11 and 9 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
. England saw a steady decrease over the
period
Use synonyms
 ,
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
reaching
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
9 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 2007. At the same time ,
average
Correct article usage
the average
show examples
 carbon dioxide for each individual in
Sweden
Use synonyms
 stood at 9 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 at the beginning .
Then
Linking Words
 it saw a rapid growth
around
Change preposition
of around
show examples
 10 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 1977 ,
however
Linking Words
Add a comma
,
show examples
this
Linking Words
 figure declined quickly until 1987 to approximately 7 metric Tennessee. After that
Use synonyms
Sweden
Change noun form
Sweden's
show examples
 rate dropped swiftly end of the
period
Use synonyms
, reaching almost 5 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 2007. At the beginning of the
period
Use synonyms
 Italy and Portugal experienced only an upward trend over the
period
Use synonyms
. CO ² emissions per person
both
Change preposition
in both
show examples
 countries were around 4 and 1 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 respectively.
The
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Italy's rate increased fourfold until 2007
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
reaching around 7 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
Add a comma
,
show examples
Portugal's rate soared suddenly around threefold and
reaching
Wrong verb form
reached
show examples
 a low point than others at 5 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 2007.
Submitted by Writing9 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, period, tonnes with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: