The graphs below show the percentage of graduates that got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia, from 2004 to 2012.

The given charts
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data
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about
the fraction of Australian people who graduated from 2 various academic subjects namely,
math
and Other and had full-time
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,and the amount of their incomes between 2004 and 2012.
Overall
, it was important that the
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number
of Australia's
inahbitants
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inhabitants
who had full-time occupations
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while
their salaries increased over the period of 8 years.
According to
the line diagram, at the start,
Math
graduates
, the main field background that their graduated found
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the
full-time jobs in 2004, scored just roughly 80% ;
then
its trend climbed marginally and hit the vertex at nearly 85% , which
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the same as Other
graduates
, in 2008;
however
, it declined slightly to just over 75%. Other
graduates
touched approximately 60% in 2004;
thereafter
, it rose moderately and reached the highest point at almost 90% in 2006 after that, it fell somewhat and in 2012 it reported just under its portion
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in 2004. The table demonstrates that both
math
graduates
and Other
graduates
recorded the same number
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in 2004 and 2006 at 41,000 and 43,000. both of them improved, so Later
Math
formed 56,000 in 2012;
additionally
, other ones composed 51,000 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words math, graduates with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate employment rate
  • full-time employment
  • university graduates
  • job market
  • economic factors
  • industry demand
  • financial crisis
  • employment trends
  • technological advancements
  • graduate employability
  • career services
  • fields of study
  • job market requirements
  • industries
  • resilient
  • vulnerable
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