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The table illustrates data on three countries.

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The table provides data on three U.S. states—
California
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,
Utah
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, and
Florida
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—regarding the percentage of people aged under 18 and over 60, average
income
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 per person, and the
proportion
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 of the population living below the
poverty
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 line.
This
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 report will summarize the key features and compare the statistics across these states.
Overall
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,
Utah
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 has the highest percentage of people under 18 and the lowest
proportion
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 of individuals aged over 60,
along with
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 the lowest average
income
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 and
poverty
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 rate.
In contrast
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,
Florida
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 stands out for having the highest
proportion
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 of elderly residents,
while
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California
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 has the highest average
income
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 but a relatively higher
poverty
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 rate than
Utah
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. In terms of age,
Utah
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 has the highest percentage of young people under 18 at 28%, significantly more than
California
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 (17%) and
Florida
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 (16%).
Conversely
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,
Florida
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 has the largest
proportion
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 of elderly individuals, with 23% aged over 60, nearly three times higher than
Utah
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 (8%) and more than
California
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 (13%). Regarding
income
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,
California
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 residents earn the most, with an average
income
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 of $23,000 per person, slightly higher than
Florida
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’s $22,000 and significantly more than
Utah
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’s $17,000. Despite its low
income
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,
Utah
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 has the smallest population living below the
poverty
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 line at 9%, compared to
Florida
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 (12%) and
California
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 (16%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words utah, income, proportion, poverty, florida, california with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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