Wild animals have no right in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is clear that

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we are living on a planet where natural resources

such

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as rainforests, wildlife, and oceans play an important role in our well-being.

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there are ongoing debates about whether the conservation of wild

animals

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can be considered a waste of resources, I strongly believe that human beings have no right to extinct other creatures for two compelling reasons.

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with, Earth is not just for mankind.

This

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planet has existed for over ten million years, and during

this

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time, there has been a natural balance between different parts of the ecosystem. But

people

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disrupt

this

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balance by doing disruptive activities; take the wildlife and loss of

species

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as an obvious example. Over the course of a few years, humans have constructed an increasing number of zoos and tribal parks in order to attract

people

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and earn money.

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, not only breeding numbers have declined, but

also

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the natural balance of hunting and poaching among

animals

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has been demolished.

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people

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have a responsibility to protect the

species

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this

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planet because biodiversity is essential for the well-being of our environment. Efforts should be made to protect

animals

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, studies have shown a clear link between the awareness of the public and their behaviour with

animals

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. They suggest that educating

people

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to avoid buying products made from certain

species

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or organizing to protect

animals

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and have harsher

punishment

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punishments

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for poaching and illegal hunting could be helpful. In conclusion,

although

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some

people

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argue that not all

animals

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are worth saving and some of them are dangerous, I once again restate my opinion that

animals

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have rights

as well as

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humans. In fact, we should not destroy their natural habitat and use them to earn money. Plus, we are responsible for them and should do our best to protect them. It is the only way some

species

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can be protected from extinction.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

317 words

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