It is often suggested that schoolchildren should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. What are the advantages and disadvantages? Do you think that advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage?

Schoolchildren
usually learn how to grow
vegetables
and keep
animals
for various purposes. Assuming that these situations are often decided by the
schoolchildren
's parents or by teachers, children probably don't have the possibility to choose whether to learn these things or not.  Having said that, in my opinion, there could be many advantages. First of all, children could improve their responsibilities for keeping
animals
. I think that because they have to teach them,
for example
saying
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them how to eat and to act when they are in a public place. Pets can
also
improve their happiness and keep them company. Talking about
vegetables
,
schoolchildren
also
need to learn how to maintain them. So children could face
to
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problems or situations they usually don't see in their regular days. Regarding the disadvantages, I think that our lives are more based on technology
then
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before and to grow
vegetables
could be unusual and not pretty useful,
for example
. Talking about
to keep
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animals
, like dogs or cats
for
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example, I don't see any type of disadvantage. In conclusion, the advantages are more than
disadvantages
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, so I believe
schoolchildren
should learn how to grow
vegetables
and keep
animals
. When they will grow up they will decide whether to do these things or not.
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  • Agriculture education
  • Practical skills
  • Organic food
  • Gardening
  • Horticulture
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Responsibility
  • Hands-on learning
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Animal husbandry
  • Health and safety concerns
  • Educational outcomes
  • Curriculum integration
  • Resource allocation
  • Cultural preferences
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