Buying things on the internet, such as groceries, books and air tickets is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages.
There is no denying the fact that online shopping is debatable.
While
some individuals believe that shopping online is more effective, others do not. this
essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects in detail.
It is commonly believed that virtual shopping is more beneficial for many reasone
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reasons
reason
To begin
with, Virtual shopping provide
opportunities for Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
people
to go shopping wherever and whenever they need. For instance
, if someone wants to buy a product, he or she can buy it at home, and anytime. Morever
, shopping online is more convenient than traditional shopping because it does not Correct your spelling
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requiers
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require
requires
people
to go to crowded places such
as malls and supermarkets. Furthermore
, some individuals who saffers
from breathing issues can feel more comfortable because Correct your spelling
suffer
suffers
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On the other side of the coin, the Internet's shopping has many negative sides. Correct your spelling
places
Initially
, depending on online shopping rather than traditional shopping may makes
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make
people
overweight after a period of time . Additionally
, virtual shopping can makes
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people
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For example
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while
he will suffers
from mental health illness because he Change the verb form
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get
used to his comfort zone which is a huge issue Change the verb form
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can
affect negatively Correct pronoun usage
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society, so traditional shopping is not a bad idea, isn't it?
In conclusion. There are pons and cons ,and Correct article usage
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has many beneficial sides ,but I Replace the word
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are both effective equally.Correct pronoun usage
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task achievement
Try to develop your main points with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Although you provide an introduction and conclusion, try to make the introduction more engaging and the conclusion more impactful.
task achievement
Some points in your essay need clearer articulation; strive for clarity in your ideas.
task achievement
The essay discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping, showing an understanding of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction presents the topic, and a conclusion summarizes your views.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...