The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
of divorces in two different countries, Finland
and Sweden
between 2011 until
2015.
Correct word choice
and
Overall
, Finland
experienced a
upward trend Change the article
an
while
Sweden
showed the
downward trend Correct article usage
a
throughout
2011 until 2015. Both, Change preposition
from
Finland
and Sweden
had the same fluctuations divorce
rates. Change preposition
in divorce
Although
Finland
had the
lower rate than Correct article usage
a
Sweden
between 2011 untul
2014, Correct your spelling
and
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
at
the end, Change preposition
in
Finland
had higher
rate than Add an article
a higher
Sweden
in 2015.
Sweden
's divorces
rate was about above 40% in 2011, the it increased to almost 50% in 2012. Change the noun form
divorce
However
the Add a comma
However,
percentage
became lower from 2013 to 2015. The percentage
showed a gradual decrease to about 47% in 2013,
and continued Remove the comma
apply
decreased
Change the verb form
to decrease
about
10% each year from 2014 to 2015. The Change preposition
by about
percentage
was about under 50% in 2014. But at the end
of period
, reached around 45% in 2014 and decreased to 37% in 2015.
Add an article
the period
Percentage
of divorces in Finald was less than 40% in 2011, Correct article usage
The percentage
then
it decreased to about 33% in 2012. But it became increased during the next two year
. It was about almost 40% in 2013, Fix the agreement mistake
years
then
it increased by around 3% in 2014, and like had consistent
Add an article
a consistent
percentage
in 2015.Submitted by imeldarosari6 on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, finland, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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