The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
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of divorces in two different countries,
Finland
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and
Sweden
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between 2011
until
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and
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2015.
Overall
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,
Finland
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experienced
a
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an
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upward trend
while
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Sweden
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showed
the
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a
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downward trend
throughout
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from
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2011 until 2015. Both,
Finland
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and
Sweden
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had the same fluctuations
divorce
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in divorce
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rates.
Although
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Finland
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had
the
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a
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lower rate than
Sweden
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between 2011
untul
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and
2014,
but
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apply
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at
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in
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the end,
Finland
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had
higher
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a higher
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rate than
Sweden
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in 2015.
Sweden
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's
divorces
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divorce
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rate was about above 40% in 2011, the it increased to almost 50% in 2012.
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However
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However,
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the
percentage
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became lower from 2013 to 2015. The
percentage
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showed a gradual decrease to about 47% in 2013
,
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apply
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and continued
decreased
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to decrease
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about
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by about
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10% each year from 2014 to 2015. The
percentage
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was about under 50% in 2014. But
at the end
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of
period
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the period
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, reached around 45% in 2014 and decreased to 37% in 2015.
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Percentage
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The percentage
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of divorces in Finald was less than 40% in 2011,
then
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it decreased to about 33% in 2012. But it became increased during the next two
year
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years
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. It was about almost 40% in 2013,
then
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it increased by around 3% in 2014, and like had
consistent
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a consistent
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percentage
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in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, finland, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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