The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
of divorces in two different countries,
Finland
and
Sweden
between 2011
until
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and
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2015.
Overall
,
Finland
experienced
a
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upward trend
while
Sweden
showed
the
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a
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downward trend
throughout
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from
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2011 until 2015. Both,
Finland
and
Sweden
had the same fluctuations
divorce
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in divorce
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rates.
Although
Finland
had
the
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a
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lower rate than
Sweden
between 2011
untul
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and
2014,
but
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at
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in
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the end,
Finland
had
higher
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a higher
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rate than
Sweden
in 2015.
Sweden
's
divorces
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divorce
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rate was about above 40% in 2011, the it increased to almost 50% in 2012.
However
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However,
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the
percentage
became lower from 2013 to 2015. The
percentage
showed a gradual decrease to about 47% in 2013
,
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and continued
decreased
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about
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by about
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10% each year from 2014 to 2015. The
percentage
was about under 50% in 2014. But
at the end
of
period
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the period
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, reached around 45% in 2014 and decreased to 37% in 2015.
Percentage
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The percentage
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of divorces in Finald was less than 40% in 2011,
then
it decreased to about 33% in 2012. But it became increased during the next two
year
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years
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. It was about almost 40% in 2013,
then
it increased by around 3% in 2014, and like had
consistent
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a consistent
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percentage
in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, finland, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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