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THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides a comparison of international
tourist
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arrivals
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 to four different countries worldwide over a 15-year
period
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, from 1995 to 2010.
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, all countries experienced a growth in
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arrivals
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. Notably, the USA stood out as the primary destination for tourists throughout the entire
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,
while
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 France demonstrated a significant surge in
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arrivals
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. In 1995, the USA had the highest number of
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arrivals
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 with 70 million visitors, peaking at 90, before experiencing a slight decline to 85
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arrivals
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. Meanwhile, France showed a dramatic inline over the
period
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 shown, starting at 30
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arrivals
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, rising to 60 in 2000 and 70 in 2005. eventually, both countries equalized with similar numbers of
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arrivals
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at the end
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 of the timespan.
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, Egypt and Brazil exhibited a similar pattern in
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arrivals
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, starting with fewer than 10 million in 1995 and remaining below 20 throughout the whole
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. Malaysia,
on the other hand
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, showed a gradual increase, adding 30 million visitors between 1995 and 2010, rising from 30 to 50.
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