THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist

 arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the
arrivng
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arrival
number
of international
tourists
around four different countries worldwide over a
period
of 15 years.
Overall
, all countries recorded an
increasing
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increase
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.
While
the USA was the primary
destenation
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destination
for tourist arrivals over the whole
period
, France
also
showed a dramatically rising.
To begin
with, the USA started
as
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with
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the highest
number
logged in 1995
by
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with
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70
tourists
then
rose to
the
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a
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peak of 90 in 2005,
afterward
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afterwards
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, saw only a small drop to 85
number of
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apply
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tourists
, where
the
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France reached its peak
at the end
of the
period
shown, after starting from 30 and recording 60 and 70
tourists
in 2000 and 2006,
respectevily
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respectively
. On the other side, Egypt and Brazil showed a similar pattern over the 15-year
period
,
with
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starting by under
than
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10
in
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at
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the beginning of the
period
and
did
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not
exceed
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20 for the rest.
by contrast
, Malaysia increased gradually with a recording of 30
differance
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differences
between 1995 and 2005
number
, starting from 20 to 50 tourist arrivals.
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