The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
ìThe table shows how British
men
and
women
who were not working spent their time in the morning and
afternoon
last
year.
Overall
we can see that there is
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a lots
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lots
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lot
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of difference in how
men
and
women
spend their time but with
greater
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a greater
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percentage
people
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of people
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doing more production tasks in the morning. Activities
such
as housework, shopping and looking for employment were about two times more popular in the morning than
the
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in the
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afternoon
.
However
,
both
men
and
women
prefer leisure
activity
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activities
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in the
afternoon
such
as reading, watching TV, visiting friends or simply sitting around. It is
also
interesting to note that
women
were more likely to do housework and
do
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shopping than
men
in
both
the morning and the
afternoon
,
while
men
were seven times more likely to spend time being active with activities
such
as decorating and gardening,
do
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doing
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sport
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sports
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and go walking. Numbers were fairly similar for the other activities with 8% of
both
men
and
women
with
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apply
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staying in bed and 5% and 7% respectively visiting town in the morning.
Finally
, the
percent
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percentage
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of people drinking was fairly small in
both
the morning and
afternoon
with slightly more
men
.
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