Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?
Animal testing for scientific reasons is still very common today. For some
people
the harm Add a comma
people,
for
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to
animals
does not justify the experimentation. Others see it as necesary
. I think that Correct your spelling
necessary
this
is a very difficult situation but that there are some alternatives. It is normal for new medicines are
tested on Change the verb form
to be
animals
.
In other words
, We experimentate so that we know that the medicine is safe before it is used on human
. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
As a result
, I believe that in this
case experimentating
is justified as without it many medicines would not Correct your spelling
experimentation
experimenting
be exist
today.
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exist
However
, there are others who argue that in this
case it even is not justified and that people
are very different to animals
so the tests are not useful. Another type of testing is for cosmetics. Because lots of beauty products
are still tested on animals
. I think that this
is not just and we do not need to make animals
to
suffer like Change the verb form
apply
this
. Furthermore
, there are lots of companies that don’t do experimented
on Wrong verb form
experiment
animals
and still make similar products
. There are some alternatives to testing products
on animals
. Some scientists develop new ways for example
using cells. Many people
argue that these ways are good but that there is no animal cruelty.
in conclusion
I would argue that animal testing for medicinal purposes could be Add a comma
conclusion,
accepting
if there is no alternative. The medicine may save lots of Change the form of the verb
accepted
people
for
dying. Animal testing for beauty Change preposition
from
products
is not acceptable and we should have new ways of test.Submitted by alessandrorepola.repola on
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coherence cohesion
Work on maintaining a consistent tone and level of formality throughout the essay. Phrases like 'this is not just' can be rephrased to maintain formality.
task achievement
Develop each argument more thoroughly. Provide additional specific examples or evidence to strengthen the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Use linking words or phrases to connect ideas more clearly.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
logical structure
Logical structure is evident through organized paragraphs focusing on distinct aspects of the topic.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides relevant examples, like cosmetics testing, to support the main points.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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