Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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Animal testing for scientific reasons is still very common today. For some
people
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the harm
for
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animals
does not justify the experimentation. Others see it as
necesary
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necessary
. I think that
this
is a very difficult situation but that there are some alternatives. It is normal for new medicines
are
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tested on
animals
.
In other words
, We experimentate so that we know that the medicine is safe before it is used on
human
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.
As a result
, I believe that in
this
case
experimentating
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experimentation
experimenting
is justified as without it many medicines would not
be exist
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today.
However
, there are others who argue that in
this
case it even is not justified and that
people
are very different to
animals
so the tests are not useful. Another type of testing is for cosmetics. Because lots of beauty
products
are still tested on
animals
. I think that
this
is not just and we do not need to make
animals
to
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suffer like
this
.
Furthermore
, there are lots of companies that don’t
do experimented
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on
animals
and still make similar
products
. There are some alternatives to testing
products
on
animals
. Some scientists develop new ways
for example
using cells. Many
people
argue that these ways are good but that there is no animal cruelty. in
conclusion
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I would argue that animal testing for medicinal purposes could be
accepting
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if there is no alternative. The medicine may save lots of
people
for
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dying. Animal testing for beauty
products
is not acceptable and we should have new ways of test.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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