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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the percentage of divorce rates in
Sweden
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 and
Finland
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 during the year 2011 to 2015. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, Swedish couples surpassed
Finland
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 in the number of divorcees throughout the given period. Significantly, after the first two years, the rate of divorce gradually decreased in
Sweden
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,
whereas
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 it increased in
Finland
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.
According to
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 the graph, the number of divorced people in
Sweden
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were
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 45% in 2011 which peaked at 49% in 2012, before falling to less than 40% in 2015. In 2012, there was a remarkable difference in the divorce rate of
Sweden
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 and
Finland
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 by 15%.
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, the rate of annulment was declining in
Sweden
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 compared to
Finland
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.
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,
Finland
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 had 38% divorcees in 2011, slightly dipping to 32% in 2012.
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, the figure moderately climbed to just over 40% in 2015. In 2014 and 2015, the number of legally separated couples in
Finland
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 was just above 40%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, finland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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