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The graph bellow shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014./ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph bellow shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014./ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrates
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 the
change
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 in the prices of three
metal
Fix the agreement mistake
metals
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 during 2014.
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This
Correct determiner usage
These
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 metals (copper,nickel and third zinc). There was
Correct article usage
a
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dramatic fall in the
pro
Correct word choice
apply
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ceed
change
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 in price compared with
previous
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the previous
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 month. Nickel was the more expensive metal. But Nickel
also
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 showed a steady decrease
about
Change preposition
during
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 the
period
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.Starting about 6 pro seed in price in January.But after 5
month
Change to a plural noun
months
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this
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 number
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change
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changed
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 to -3.In July
this
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 number stable to -1. Copper shows fall in the first time.In May there was stable.
However
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,In the middle of
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period
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the period
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 there was
increase
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an increase
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 for 3 months and again
fall
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fell
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 to 0.5
pro ceed
Correct your spelling
proceed
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.
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on The
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On the
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 other hand,zinc in the first time was increase.but
this
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 number
not
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was not
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 stable around the
period
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.In every
months
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month
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 increases for 1 pro ceed to July. After months
this
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 pro ceed was stable to October and Again increase about the
period
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.
BY
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By
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 the
period
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 zinc was in the first place in
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change
Add an article
a change
the change
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 in price compared with
previous
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the previous
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 month
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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