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The graph bellow shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014./ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#bellow #change #prices #three #metals #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the middle changes of
copper
's, nickel's and zinc's
cost
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costs
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 every 30 days in 2014 in percentage. It's important to note that, despite the different
value
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values
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 of changes in price in the beginning,
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 they had a likely same 1, 1.5 and 2
percent
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per cent
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On
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In
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 January, Nickel had the pick of the trend
and
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,
while
 other metals
was
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were
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 lower In 3 times. At the start,
former
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the former
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was
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stood at 6
percent
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per cent
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,
and drop
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dropped
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 dramatically
for
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by
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 2.5
percent
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per cent
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 per month and
had been
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was
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 stable from March to April.
However
, there was a little fluctuation for three 90 days, but, despite
this
, the
amount
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number
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 of changes in
price
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the price
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 of Nickel stood at -1 from July to September,
after
this
, the value fell to -2 for 4 weeks and
remaining
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the remaining
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 period saw the sharply increase to 1
percent
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per cent
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In
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At
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 the same time, zinc and
copper
 started at
much
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a much
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 lower
value
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values
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, 1 and 2
percent
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per cent
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. At
first,
former metal jumped to 3
percent
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per cent
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 in February,
while
 letter metal dropped slightly.
However
, the zinc had to go down too, but he was to 1
percent
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per cent
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 more than
copper
 every month.
Nevertheless
, in the middle of
period
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, June experienced a
little
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small
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 rise
of
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in
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copper
, and now, both of the metals switched their places. And
in
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at
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 the end of 2014. They had a
different
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difference
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in
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of
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 0.5
percent
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per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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