Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that goverments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is undeniable that
education
is the most essential part of children's holistic growth since many people claim that the government should cover all the expenses for their studies such
as their university fees rather than looking at their social background. I partially agree with this
notion due to
the reasons explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, the reasons why authorities should not provide free education
to all. Firstly
, it makes them dependent on others for everything and the habit of reliability has had an adverse impact on children's future. To be precise, when they have to pay their whole tuition fee on their own, it becomes their responsibility and to do so, they have to do part-time work which teaches them the value of money
. For instance
, international students are the best example of this
because they earn and spend money
according to
their own will. Hence
, they try to spend their hard-earned money
for their betterment rather than wasting it on useless products. Secondly
, it aids in making them self-reliable, a person who takes their decision on their own related to their study and others because they are independent now and know what is good and bad for them. Therefore
, by looking at children like this
it feels that the future of the country is in safe hands.
However
, education
is considered a fundamental right, and providing free educational institutes ensures that individuals from all financial backgrounds have an equal opportunity to achieve higher education
and improve their socio-economic status. Meanwhile, if everyone has access to higher knowledge it helps them get a good job which indirectly provides benefits to the government as by investing in education
, they can create a more knowledgeable and skilled workforce, which leads to economic growth, innovation and more competitive market as they are the one who pays a hefty amount of taxes after getting their job. Thus
, the money
they spend on students get
back to them after Change the verb form
gets
sometimes
.
Correct your spelling
some time
To conclude
, although
providing money
to students for their education
helps them in gaining
Wrong verb form
gain
education
Correct article usage
an education
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