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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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These days,
people
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 have various
choice
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 for reading
books
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 from the prior
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 owing to the fact that most of them
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reading
raiding
 non-published types
instead
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 of
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books
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.
While
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 the
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electronic
books
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 have some drawbacks, I still
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 that cannot overshadow the benefits. On the one side, the merits of
e-
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books
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 are so varied.
Firstly
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, populations at all the
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 that
they
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have
a
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little
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 like
in
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the
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public transportation,
resturants
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restaurants
 and so on ,
they
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can read
the
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books
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 inasmuch as their
books
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 are
in
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on
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 their phones or
tables
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tablets
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, the portable electronic devices that help
people
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 to have access to a range of
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the
 things;
as a result
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, they do not need to carry a lot of
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.
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, if
people
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 use not published
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books
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, they keep their environments.
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,
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books
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 prevent deforestation because they do not need
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, the material
that is
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 produced from trees. On the other side,
e-
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books
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 have several demerits. On the one hand, when communities read electronic
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, the population who work
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in
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publishing
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the publishing
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industries
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industry
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 lose their jobs.
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, the light of electronic gadgets that
people
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 use for reading
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injore
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injure
people
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's eyes;
consequently
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, after a long
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 the countries
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a lot of
pations
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patients
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 who have eyes issues.
To sum up
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, reading
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books
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 impacts
on
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people
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's health and some employees;
however
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, the good points can eclipse the bad points on account of the fact that
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 access to a range of
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book
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 and saving the environment are more important.
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