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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides information regarding the number of individuals who spend their money on buying tea or
coffee
at
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in
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 five different cities
of
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in
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 Australia.
Overall
, it can be seen that over the past 4 weeks people
were
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have been
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 interested
to
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in
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 going to
coffee
shop
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shops
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 and
drink
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drinking
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 their
coffee
 or tea at
coffee
shop
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shops
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 in most of the cities.
Firstly
,
sydney
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Sydney
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 has the highest number of
residant
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resident
residents
 who got
a
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apply
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fresh
coffee
 with more than 40
percent
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per cent
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of whearas
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whearas
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whereas
,
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whereas Adelide
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Adelide
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Adelaide
 and Brisbane had the lowest amount with nearly 35
percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 percentage.
Secondly
, more than 60
percent
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per cent
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 of people
of
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in
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 Melbourne wanted to spend their time at
coffee
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a coffee
the coffee
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shop
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shops
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while
 drinking their
coffee
 which is the highest number
compare
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compared
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 to other cities.
However
, around 50
percent
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per cent
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 of Australian citizens
drinked
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drink
 their
coofee
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coffee
 or tea at
coffee
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the coffee
a coffee
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shop
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shops
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. In conclusion, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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Australian people tend to place an order at the
coffee
shop
instead
 of
grab
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grabbing
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 their drink and
leave
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leaving
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 the place.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, shop, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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