The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides information regarding the number of individuals who spend their money on buying tea or
coffee
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at
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five different cities
of
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Australia.
Overall
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, it can be seen that over the past 4 weeks people
were
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have been
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interested
to
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in
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going to
coffee
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shop
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shops
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and
drink
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drinking
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their
coffee
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or tea at
coffee
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shop
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shops
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in most of the cities.
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,
sydney
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Sydney
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has the highest number of
residant
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resident
residents
who got
a
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fresh
coffee
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with more than 40
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percent
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per cent
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of whearas
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whearas
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whereas
,
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whereas Adelide
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Adelide
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Adelaide
and Brisbane had the lowest amount with nearly 35
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percent
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per cent
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of
total
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the total
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percentage.
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, more than 60
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percent
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per cent
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of people
of
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Melbourne wanted to spend their time at
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coffee
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a coffee
the coffee
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shop
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shops
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while
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drinking their
coffee
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which is the highest number
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compared
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to other cities.
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, around 50
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percent
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per cent
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of Australian citizens
drinked
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drink
their
coofee
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coffee
or tea at
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coffee
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the coffee
a coffee
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shop
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shops
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. In conclusion, most
of
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the
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Australian people tend to place an order at the
coffee
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shop
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instead
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of
grab
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grabbing
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their drink and
leave
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leaving
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the place.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, shop, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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