Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disargee ?

People
have different opinions about whether
university
education
should be free or not. Many think
governments
should make it free without any payment. The essay totally disagrees with that statement. In my opinion,
university
education
cannot be fully free for
people
. If it
will be
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free,everyone will try to access to
university
and it can lead to limited spaces in some
universities
.
Also
, it can be unfair for talented
people
who want to get a
university
degree.
According to
the above statement, Getting a free
university
degree can create place problems for some
universities
that have limited classrooms for lessons.
This
can cause a big problem for students taking classes easily.
This
can
alsobe
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also be
amajor
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a major
major
issue for professors to regulate students and teach something new.
For example
, some Azerbaijan
universities
have limits for each speciality and department. If
universities
are free for everyone it can pass the limits of
universities
.
Additionally
, it can be unfair for really talented
people
. They can disappear among a lot of
people
who will apply for free
university
degrees.
For example
, my cousin tried to
apply
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free
university
with a scholarship in Germany
last
year but he couldn't achieve his goal because lots of
people
tried to get scholarships for free studying at
university
. In conclusion, free
university
education
can cause big issues for
universities
and
governments
. If
universities
will be free ,
governments
should build new big
universities
to solve limited space problems. Free
education
also
can lead to
disappearance
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the disappearance
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of really talented
people
. Because of
this
, in my opinion,
universities
cannot be fully free.
Instead
of
this
governments
can create a charity for poor
people
who have a big talent for getting
a
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university
degrees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equal opportunity
  • financial background
  • equitable society
  • economic benefits
  • knowledgeable workforce
  • innovation
  • financial burden
  • student loans
  • long-term debt
  • nurturing talent
  • governmental budgets
  • funding
  • essential services
  • quality of education
  • overcrowding
  • scholarships
  • grants
  • low-income students
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