Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefit and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
The trend of visiting unpopular destinations which consist
harsh
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of harsh
contions
has grown more prominent Correct your spelling
conditions
in
these days. Some people prefer to visit Change preposition
apply
Sahara
desert or the Antarctic Correct article usage
the Sahara
may be
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maybe
becuse
of curiosity. In Correct your spelling
because
this
essay, I will discuss advantages
and disadvantages of travelling Correct article usage
the advantages
such
hardest locations.
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to such
Firstly
, the main advantage of touring less popular destiniations
would be to seek Correct your spelling
destinations
destination
hidden
beauty of Correct article usage
the hidden
this
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these
areas
. Most of the time some part
of the Sahara, have not been Fix the agreement mistake
parts
touch
by humans so tourists Wrong verb form
touched
more
prone to explore these locations and Add a missing verb
are more
desperatly
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desperately
looking
to get Wrong verb form
look
credits
for finding these secret Fix the agreement mistake
credit
attrative
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attractive
places
. This
will be a positive feature of traveling
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travelling
these
significant Change preposition
to these
places
otherwise
, no one will know about it. Further
, if one person opens these beautiful places
to the world, it will become more popular and people tend to more
explore other unfamiliar Correct quantifier usage
apply
areas
shuch
as Correct your spelling
such
Himalayas
or deep in the ocean.
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the Himalayas
However
, there are some disadvantages are
associated with travelling to difficult tourist Unnecessary verb
apply
areas
. One of the main issue
is Change to a plural noun
issues
that
threat to Correct determiner usage
the
individual's
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an individual's
health
. It is know
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a know
fact
that most of the difficult tourist attraction Add an article
the fact
areas
have extreme weather conditions or unknown animals or pathogens can
cause Correct pronoun usage
that can
direct
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a direct
threat
to tourist's life and finding adequate Fix the agreement mistake
threats
health
facilities would be challenging in these areas
. Hence
, undoubtly
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undoubtedly
health
concers
would be the main disadvantage Correct your spelling
concerns
for
travelling to these locations.
In conclusion, Change preposition
of
although
people more
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are
lean
to visit unexplored harderest Correct word choice
likely
area
in the world Fix the agreement mistake
areas
due to
their curiosity to search these places
, the
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apply
health related
concerns will draw Add a hyphen
health-related
backs
their positivity of visiting these Replace the word
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areas
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Use specific examples to further illustrate the benefits and drawbacks of visiting difficult places.
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