the charts below give information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are urrently attending.

the charts below give information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are urrently attending.
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The charts give a breakdown of the percentages of each location of
dance
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classes and the number of pupils in a town in Australia who attend different types of
dance
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classes.
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, the most popular place for playing
dance
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is private studios and
students
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are more tendency to play the
Ballet
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dance
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. Private studios
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the most popular among
students
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with about half of the whole percentage. School halls (after school)
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community halls and other kinds of locations are in the second and third categories with 24 % for the former and 18 % for the latter. College-based studios
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in the
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category with 10 %. The
students
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who are 11 to 16 play modern
dance
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more than other kinds of
dance
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with more than 500
students
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. The figure is followed by tap and
ballet
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dance
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with over 400
students
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and
ballet
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, respectively. The other group of
students
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is under 11 and plays
ballet
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dance
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with 600
students
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which is the largest number. Tap and modern
dance
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with over 400
students
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and 300
students
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are
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the following rate.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, students, ballet with synonyms.
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