the charts below give information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are urrently attending.

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The charts give a breakdown of the percentages of each location of

dance

classes and the number of pupils in a town in Australia who attend different types of

dance

classes.

Overall

, the most popular place for playing

dance

is private studios and

students

are more tendency to play the

Ballet

dance

. Private studios

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are

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the most popular among

students

with about half of the whole percentage. School halls (after school)

and

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apply

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community halls and other kinds of locations are in the second and third categories with 24 % for the former and 18 % for the latter. College-based studios

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are

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in the

last

category with 10 %. The

students

who are 11 to 16 play modern

dance

more than other kinds of

dance

with more than 500

students

. The figure is followed by tap and

ballet

dance

with over 400

students

and

ballet

, respectively. The other group of

students

is under 11 and plays

ballet

dance

with 600

students

which is the largest number. Tap and modern

dance

with over 400

students

and 300

students

are

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the following rate.

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3Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

181 words

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Clear and correct grammar

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the charts below give information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are urrently attending.

You recently learned that a close friend of yours has had a baby, and you purchased a gift for the baby. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: Congratulate them on the arrival of the baby. Describe the gift you have chosen for the baby.

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Some parents allow their children to play on electronic devices such as computers and smartphones as they think it is important for the learning of technological skills. Other parents prohibit their children from using these electronic devices. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines, and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?