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Many people believe that cycling is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is still unpopular in many countries. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among

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Many
people
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 think that cycling is a healthy and environmentally friendly method of
transportation
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.
However
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, it is still unpopular in many countries. The reasons behind
this
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 are a cycle is a slow
mode
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 of
transportation
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, and it requires manual
labour
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 to operate. To encourage
people
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for cycling
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, awareness should be created about the benefits of riding a
bicycle
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. One of the principal reasons for being unpopular is
bicycles
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 require manual
labour
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 to operate.
Generally
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people
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 do not want to
use
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 manual
labour
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while
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commute
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 to their destinations.
Moreover
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, a
bicycle
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 is a slow
mode
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 of
transportation
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. It takes a significant amount of time to commute from one place to another through a
bicycle
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.
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, in regard to long distances,
bicycles
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 are not
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suitable
mode
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 of
transportation
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.
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, many
people
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 do not love to
use
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bicycles
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 as a
mode
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 of
transportation
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 because they cannot
use
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 them
while
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 travelling to the majority of their destinations. To make
bicycles
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 a favourite
mode
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 of
transportation
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 among the public, awareness should be created. The government can arrange several campaigns to promote the importance of
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 among the general public. These campaigns will promote the health and environmental benefits of
bicycles
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 will be inspired to choose
bicycles
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 as an alternative
mode
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 of
transportation
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. They will try to
use
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bicycles
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 where possible.
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,
people
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 in India,
use
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bicycles
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instead
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 of cars, when they travel at least four or five
kilometers
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kilometres
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 from their homes. In conclusion,
bicycles
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 are not popular because they are not appropriate for
long distance
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long-distance
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 travel, and they require manual
labour
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 to operate. Awareness should be created by the government to promote the health and environmental benefits of
bicycles
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.
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