News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Discuss. (Cambridge IELTS 1).

Most of us rely
companies
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that have broadcasts on
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TV
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and newspapers to know what is happening in the world. Since we rely on these companies and their editors to show us
truthfull
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truthful
truthfully
news
, we need to understand what
infuences
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influences
them. Unless we might become used to fake
news
and
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advicate
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advocate
for good journalism. There are many factors that affect what
news
editors choose to show the public. A big one is the
editors
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editor's
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personal beliefs which might not
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align
with the public opinion. Another factor is the
companies
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company's
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bottom line and
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its
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ability to make money. A company answers to its owners and they hold sway over what it says.
Alot
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A lot
of people nowadays use social media to get their
news
, and not a small amount of times social media gets things wrong.
This
has extended to official
news
too, and I believe we
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used to it with
excuse
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the excuse
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of the
news
faster delivery. It would be better if we as a people held the agencies accountable for their
news
coverage. A focus on the authenticity of
news
is more important than the speed of its delivery.
To conclude
, there are
alot
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a lot
factors
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of factors
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that affect those who share the
news
with us and we should keep that in mind.
In addition
to that we have a
responsibilty
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responsibility
to make sure those people know those factors and that they are working on mitigating them. The
news
should be factual and any opinions should be presented as
such
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