The line graph show the gold sales in Dubai in 2002
The line graph shows the
sales
of Use synonyms
gold
in one Asian city, Dubai, in 2002. Units are measured in millions of Use synonyms
dirhams
.
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Overall
, Linking Words
gold
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sales
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fluctuate
significantly during the whole Wrong verb form
fluctuated
year
, with the highest Use synonyms
amount
recorded in March. Use synonyms
However
, it is July and September months that saw the lowest Linking Words
amount
of Use synonyms
gold
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sales
in Dubai in 2002.
To start with the first seven months, around 200 Use synonyms
million
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of
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dirhams
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was
spent on Correct subject-verb agreement
were
gold
by people in Dubai in the first month of the Use synonyms
year
, after which, Use synonyms
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surge
to about 350 Wrong verb form
surged
million
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of
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dirhams
in March - the highest sale. Use synonyms
However
, the Linking Words
sales
of Use synonyms
gold
experienced a dramatic decline to approximately 120 Use synonyms
million
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of
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dirhams
in July, the second month of summer.
Regarding the rest of the Use synonyms
year
, people spent just above 200 Use synonyms
million
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of
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dirhams
in order to purchase Use synonyms
gold
in August. After falling to the Use synonyms
amount
of July's Use synonyms
gold
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sales
in September, the figure rose again to about 180 Use synonyms
million
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of
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dirhams
in October. Use synonyms
Finally
, by the end of the Linking Words
year
, Use synonyms
this
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amount
showed almost no changes.Use synonyms
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