The line graph show the gold sales in Dubai in 2002
The line graph shows the
sales
of gold
in one Asian city, Dubai, in 2002. Units are measured in millions of dirhams
.
Overall
, gold
sales
fluctuate
significantly during the whole Wrong verb form
fluctuated
year
, with the highest amount
recorded in March. However
, it is July and September months that saw the lowest amount
of gold
sales
in Dubai in 2002.
To start with the first seven months, around 200 million
of
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dirhams
was
spent on Correct subject-verb agreement
were
gold
by people in Dubai in the first month of the year
, after which, this
figure surge
to about 350 Wrong verb form
surged
million
of
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dirhams
in March - the highest sale. However
, the sales
of gold
experienced a dramatic decline to approximately 120 million
of
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dirhams
in July, the second month of summer.
Regarding the rest of the year
, people spent just above 200 million
of
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dirhams
in order to purchase gold
in August. After falling to the amount
of July's gold
sales
in September, the figure rose again to about 180 million
of
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dirhams
in October. Finally
, by the end of the year
, this
amount
showed almost no changes.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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