Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
people
prefer
full
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time
jobs
more than casual
jobs
, the other group prefer
the
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casual
jobs
more. We will discuss both sides and I will give you my opinion about
this
statement.
People
prefer
full
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time
jobs
because there are many advantages,
such
as better pay.
That is
important for a
lot
of
people
. and the regular working hours are better than the hours of casual
work
.
However
, there are many disadvantages,
such
as
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people
becoming tired from
work
.
This
makes it hard to see their family for a longer
time
. Other
people
prefer casual
jobs
because they have a
lot
of free
time
to go to see their family and if they have a kid they want to play with them.
However
casual
jobs
have a
lot
of disadvantages,
such
as less pay. Casual
jobs
will give you a
lot
of free
time
that you could be spending to earn more money.
Last
but not least, in my
opinion
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I prefer
the
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full
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time
work
to
part
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part-time
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time
work
because they pay you a
lot
of money and I know the
time
I will be working every day. But in casual
jobs
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you go to
work
every day at different hours and that’s
vary
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uncomfortable for me.
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Your essay clearly presents both views regarding full-time and casual jobs, which effectively addresses the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are appropriately structured, providing a clear start and end to the discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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