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The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the ratio of the
oil
resources
 in 10 different parts of the world,
as well as
 the proportion of
oil
 consumed every year in the same territories.
Overall
, the richest area in
oil
resources
 by far is
Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
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 East,
while
 Australia and New Zealand almost do not have
this
 fuel.
It is clear that
 Asia, the US, and Western
Europe
, consume the highest amount of
oil
. Focusing first on the mining of
oil
resources
,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East is the leader in
this
 industry, with almost 56% of
oil
resources
 held each year,
while
 for Canada, Central/South
America
, Eastern
Europe
, and Africa, the corresponding figure is approximately between 15 and 6 per cent. The other areas
such
 as Asia,
America
, Western
Europe
, Australia and New Zealand (combined), and others have less than 3%. As for the consumption of these
resources
, the US, Western
Europe
, and Asia utilise them most actively, at the level of nearly 20-25%,
whereas
Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
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 East, Central and South
America
 (combined), and Eastern
Europe
 consume five times less. Regarding
America
, Australia, New Zealand, Western European and Asian countries, the total consumption there accounts for only up to 3% of the general world's consumption of mined
oil
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, resources, europe, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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