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The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the situation before and the modifications in a
library
 after a five-year period.
overall
, the
library
 had been altered tremendously by the next five years. The place had been facilitated,
which
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and
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 were added some spaces for more subjects. The
usge
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usage
use
 of technology
had
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has
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 increased as well.
According to
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the pervious
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pervious
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previous
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 map, On the
left hand
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left-hand
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 corner, there were two spaces which were allcated to
self help
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self-help
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 and history,
while
 other spaces
had been
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were
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 added in the next five years kitchen, economics, and law. Fiction
lied
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 on the north of the
library
, which was moved between history and
self help
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self-help
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in
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on
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 the left side.
In addition
, it was replaced by
children
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children's
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 books. At the centre, there were
eight minute
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 tables for studying,
whilst
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but
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 they
turn
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turned
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 out to be four larger ones. On the
right
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other
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 hand, in the past, there was a space for newspapers and periodicals which were replaced by films and DVDs. Computers
had
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have
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 been added
on
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to
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 the bottom of
this
 space. In
south
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the south
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 of the
library
, there
were
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was
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entrance
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an entrance
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, librarian's desk and stairs which remained unchanged.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • modernize
  • technological facilities
  • computer stations
  • digital book borrowing
  • interactive learning
  • family-friendly spaces
  • cafe or lounge area
  • social interaction
  • open spaces
  • flexible seating arrangements
  • collaborative work
  • community events
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