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Some people spend a lot of money on weddings. Why do they do this? Do you think it is good to spend a lot of money on weddings?

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A wedding is an important moment in everyone's
life
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.
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 many
people
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 organize a large wedding
event
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 to fulfil their
life
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 goals.
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 some
people
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 spend enough money
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 their abilities and
life
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 priorities. There are many reasons why some
people
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 spend a
lot
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 of payment on a wedding celebration. First of all, a wedding is a one-day moment that only happens once in a lifetime.
This
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 celebration brings precious memories to someone's
life
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. The wedding moment is not only about the bride and groom, but
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 involves both parties' families, friends, guests, and the culture that must be carried out at a wedding reception. All of those things require a
lot
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 of cash.
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, nowadays, there are many trends in the wedding season,
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 as pre-wedding
content
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. Some
people
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 follow the trends and spend a
lot
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 of money just for the
content
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. They create photo and video documentation for pre-wedding
content
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,
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 show off the
content
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 to their social media. It is very trending now.
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, in my opinion, spending a
lot
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 of cash that we get from working hard for an
event
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 is unnecessary. After the wedding
event
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, there will be many needs that a married couple must have,
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 as a house and its contents, a car, other daily necessities, health insurance, and children's education. There are more valuable things than a one-day wedding ceremony that requires payment.
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, some
communites
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communities
 borrow funds from the bank and make instalments to repay the bill. I think it only adds to household problems. In conclusion,
people
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 have to be wise in organizing a wedding
event
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according to
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 their abilities and priorities. They have to consider many important and valuable things that are needed in
life
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 after marriage.

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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly presented, helping to frame the main ideas effectively.
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The essay provides relevant examples to support the main ideas, particularly in discussing the societal trends influencing wedding expenditures.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Lavish
  • Societal norms
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic benefits
  • Luxurious
  • Ceremonies
  • Designer outfits
  • Unforgettable experience
  • Obligation
  • Social status
  • Memorable
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Grand
  • Expectations
  • Local economy
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