The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate
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pathways to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
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, what stands out from both maps is that parking spaces, bus
station
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and roads around the hospital were developed and modernized between these two years. In detail, multiple bus stops on
the
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both sides of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
in 2007 had been converted to a big bus station on the west side of
main
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hospital
road
by 2010. Another noticeable development is that the car park for
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and staff on the east side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
in 2007 was dedicated to a
staff only
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parking-lot
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and a new spacious parking space
added
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on the east side of the hospital for public use in 2010. Regarding traffic management, there were no roundabouts in 2007 but in 2010 two roundabouts were added at the north and the south part of
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road
where it crossed the hospital ring
road
and city
road
respectively
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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